i was definatly captured all the way to the end. a simple story line whould have worked much better. XXX Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings. a simple story line whould have worked much better. good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky. good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky. If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. Right now you are trying to be clever. I write and sell a few stories. I write and sell a few stories. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!!
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