Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Please edit and repost!!!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:36Great story, keep it up. Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Please edit and repost!!!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:36Great story, keep it up. Pornhat Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.«12» Just needs some proof reading to make it easier to read.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:20Great story, keep it up. Please edit and repost!!!anonymous readerReport 2012-11-17 22:03:36Great story, keep it up. 10 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-12-17 16:32:00want part 2, pleaseanonymous readerReport 2012-11-20 02:07:30When you have dialogue, use quotation marks and separate lines to make it easier to read.anonymous readerReport 2012-11-18 14:55:50I’d like to
