I write and sell a few stories. Right now you are trying to be clever. Porn video WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! a simple story line whould have worked much better. If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. The “D” was pure hoke. 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! The “D” was pure hoke. I also agree with wordytom… Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings. Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. Why not try to tell a straight story that starts at the beginning
